ENGLISH 5

Show your ability to analyze, correct, and revise the 

following rough draft

, giving your input on the revision necessary to improve the quality of this essay. You will show successful completion of this deliverable by:

· Providing feedback for corrections/alterations using the Comments feature in Word (Review tab).

· Respond to the six questions at the end of the student rough draft linked above.

· Use complete sentences in all of your responses.

Should Not Privatize Prisons
Prisons should not be privatized because punishing criminal activity should not be a profit business. It is not the place of private prisons to administer punishments. It is the State or government that decides who is a prisoner so they should remain responsible for them until rehabilitated. It is wrong to put a private company that makes a profit off a being in charge of prison operations because their goal is profit not punishment or rehabilitation. Private prisons that cut costs may risk security problems because cutting costs often means cutting corners. I think private prisons are wrong, but .

Prison should not be privatized because the path to profit is to treat human beings badly. Prisons are based on two things custody and care. No one wants to cut corners on the custody aspects of a prison. Care is the only part of a budget that has room to be cut. “One way for-profit prisons to minimize costs is by skimping on provisions, including food. “ A psychiatrist who investigated a privately run prison in Mississippi found that the inmates were severely underfed and looked “almost emaciated.” During their incarceration, prisoners lost anywhere from 10 to 60 pounds.” Citation Steven Starkey

Additionally, there is a financial incentive to do a bad job. The more effective a correctional facility is, the less need of its services. If the inmates have educational, work release programs, medical care such as anger management or mental health while locked up its less likely for them to return to a prison after being released. There will never be a point of not needing prisons; if there is better correctional policies and administration could result in a reduction of need. Privatized prisons are disastrous from the point of view of a profit organization.

Finally, the most important reason Prison should not be privatized is the right to punish belongs only to the state. The criminal justice system is the process by which legally deprive human beings of their guaranteed rights. When someone other than the state tries to deprive someone of these freedoms and rights, charge them with crimes so if it is a privatized prison doing no different than one that committed the crime.

Prisons should not be privatized because punishing criminal activity should not be a “for profit” business. It is not the place of private prisons to administer prisoner punishments because it is the State government that determine who is a prisoner and they should remain responsible for them until time has been served. Private prisons that cut costs may risk security problems because cutting costs often means cutting corners which is less
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Privatizing prison health care leaves inmates in pain … Friday, Oct. 3, 2014 retrieved from http://www.mypalmbeachpost.com/news/news/privatized-prison-health-care-in-florid
Prison privatization: a study of the causes and magnitude … (n.d.). Retrieved from http://www.worldcat.org/title/prison-privatization-a-study-of-the-causes-and-mag

Deliverable 05: Collaboration on the Final Draft of a Persuasive Essay:

Please answer the following short questions as if you are offering feedback and input–in about 25 word answers–to your work colleague as a form of solid feedback about this paper. Your sentences should be complete and answer the prompt in light of what you are reading before you.

1) I, the reader, feel the topic of this paper is stated quite plainly and a clear position is taken on it because (why or why not?):

2) Name 2 elements of the writing process you think this author needed to consider more thoroughly in stating his/her position.

3) Did you find the research element to be covered sufficiently in this persuasive research essay? Why or Why Not?

4) Consider the sentence structures here. Do they demonstrate the writer’s critical thinking ability in this exercise? Why or Why Not?

5) List 4 unique errors pertaining to the correct use of APA formatting throughout this paper:

6) In a brief sentence or two, what would you advise this writer to do to improve the organization of this persuasive essay? Consider introduction, body paragraphs, conclusion, research support, citations, reference list, sentence revisions, and/or voice, audience, and relating to the reader.